Lifestyle of Complexity or
Simplicity |
1st. Draft |
2nd. Draft |
After discussing, we regard that complex lifestyle is like urban |
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lifestyle. It changes a lot and
waste a lot. Everyone can be |
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so wasteful and materialistic that he lives in a work-buy-spend- |
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and-throw-away lifestyle. People work in long hours and
making |
1.mv |
more money for
satisfy them. Most people just aren’t really |
2.inf. |
being honest with themselves about money. They
have a
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high-stress
life and more desires. In fact, they don’t know that |
3.adj. |
all they do is far more than
they need. As we know,
simplely |
4.adj |
lifestyle is opposite to lifestyle.
The word “easy” to
describe |
5.
mv. |
this lifestyle. In other words,
it makes people work less and |
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spend less. They
know what they need to do, and don’t think |
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too much. As the article suggests,
people may do better work |
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when they
choice
work
less and spend more time on her family |
6. mv. 7.
inf.
8.
prep |
They don’t buy too much and
use
longer so as to saving. |
9. im.
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People don’t worry about
nothing to do. They just work less and |
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have free time to
do what they are interested. He or she pays |
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attention
to the disposables, food, entertainment and clothing. |
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We like simple lifestyle more than complex
lifestyle. We have |
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three reasons to support it. First, we
think make
money is not |
10. g. |
the most important thing in our life.
Because when most people |
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make money,
they lose the direction of life. Second,
in addition |
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to our friends, our families are the people who
are closed to |
11. adj |
us. So we should spend more time and pay
more attention to |
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them. Final,
simple lifestyle let
us face less pressure. Our life |
12.
adv.
13.
agr.
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will
become easily, and we can do what we like. |
14.
adj. |
Due to the three reasons, simple
lifestyle maybe
it will |
15. red. |
bring
more fun to us than complex lifestyle. |
16. agr.
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Score: 65 |
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After discussing, we regard that complex
lifestyle is |
like urban lifestyle. It means changing
and wasting. |
Everyone can be so wasteful and
materialistic that |
he lives in a
work-busy-spend-and-throw-away |
life style. People work in long hours and
make more |
money to satisfy
them. Most people just are not |
really being honest with themselves about
money. |
They have a highly stressful life and more
desires. |
In fact, they do not know that all they do
is far |
more than they need. |
As we know, simple
lifestyle is opposite to complex |
lifestyle. The word“easy”describes
this lifestyle. |
In other words, it makes people work less and spend |
less. They know what they need to do, and do not |
think too
much. As the article says,
people may
do
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better work when they
choose to work less
and |
spend more time
with their
family. They do not buy |
too much and things
they buy can last longer so |
as to saving.
People do not worry about nothing to |
do. They just work less and have free time to do |
what they are interested. He or she pays attention |
to the disposables, food, entertainment and |
clothing. We like simple lifestyle more than |
complex lifestyle. We have three reasons to support |
it. First,
we think making money is not the
most |
important thing in our life. When most people make |
money, they lose the direction of life. Second, in |
addition to our friends, our
families are the people |
who are close
to us. So we should spend more time |
and pay more attention to them.
Finally, simple |
lifestyle lets us face less pressure. Our life
will |
become easy,
and we can do what we like. Due to |
the three reasons, simple
lifestyle will bring more |
fun to us than
complex
lifestyle. |
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Score:
85 |
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Explanation |
1 |
由於一個句子(sentence)只能有一個主動詞,
但常常會多需要一個主動詞,
在這種情況下,
對等連接詞被允許來連接兩個動詞,
而免去另寫一個句子的麻煩.
所以在這個句子裡連接詞and
連接兩個主動詞work
及make
而改成work in long hours and make more
money |
2 |
同理,
如果同一個句子再需要另一個動詞怎麼辦?
那就用不定詞 to (infinitive to)後面加動詞原型所以要寫成 to satisfy.
另外,
不定詞to常是片語in order to的縮寫,
有作某事欲達到某項目地的涵意.
因此這個句子的意思是: “人们上班時間加長以及賺多點錢的目地是為了滿足他們(的慾望).
另外如果要用for(為了),
動詞後面要加ing,
變成動名詞(gerund),
因為for為介係詞(preposition),
根據文法規定,
介係詞後面要跟名詞,
而動名詞是具有名詞的性質,
因此即使要用for也要寫成for satisfying. |
3 |
形容詞 (adjective)
形容名詞 (noun); life
為名詞,
前面的詞性(part of speech)理所當然應為形容詞. stress
為名詞, stressful為形容詞;
又形容形容詞的詞性為副詞(adverb), high的副詞形態為highly,
所以應改為highly-stressful life. |
4 |
這可能是筆誤. simple
lifestyle
很順口,
不是嗎?
然而道理是:
形容詞形容名詞,
並不是副詞形容名詞.
而simple lifestyle一個形容詞加一個名詞形成一個名詞片語(noun phrase),
同時也成了這個句子的主詞(subject).
記住一個句子的主詞一定是名詞或名詞片語. |
5 |
The word“easy”是一個名詞片語,
理所當然是這個句子的主詞;
那麼主動詞是describe.
不定詞
to
後面加動詞原型,
這樣的型態是動詞片語,
不能是主要動詞,
因此去掉to.
但The
word“easy”(easy這個字)是主詞單數第三人稱,
所以主動詞後要變化,
describe變成describes.
“easy”
在此處是指一個字a
word,
但這個字是指easy
所以要用指定冠詞the.
The word easy describes
this
lifestyle (simple lifestyle).
意思是:簡樸過日子就是怡然自得.
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6, 7 |
這也可能是筆誤.
choice大家都知道是名詞,
動詞是choose;
在時間副詞子句(adverbial
clause): when they choice work less裡,
work
是這個時間副詞子句的第二個動詞,
所以必須在兩個動詞間加入不定詞to.
正確的子句是:
People may do better when they choose to work less and spend more time
with their family.
(人們表現的會更好,
當他們選擇縮減工作時數以便和他們的家人有更多時間相聚時)
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8 |
片語spend
on意思是:
花費時間在某件事上.
但我們不說把時間花費在家人身上,
我們要說的是:
與家人在一起,
因此在這種情況下用with
(與誰在一起)是合情合理的 |
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They don’t buy too much and use longer so as to saving.
這個句子(sentence)的意思極不清楚.
連接詞and除了連接動詞之外,
也可以連接兩個子句,
同時這兩個子句所提到的事項,
必須是相關的.
這個句子的第一個子句
(clause)
由於主詞及主動詞明顯,
因此意思清楚:
他們不太購物(They
don’t buy too much).
因此問題出在第二個子句,
“沒有主詞”
,
也就是說甚麼東西可以用的久一些以達到節約的目地呢?
第一個子句提到購物,
那麼第二個子句的主詞一定是與他們所買的東西有關囉?
所以主詞可以寫成things
(which) they buy (他們買的東西),
而主動詞為last
(持久),
所以第二個子句的意思就變得清楚了things
they buy can last longer (他們買的東西可以用得久一些),
因此整個句子的意思是:
他們不太購物而為了節約他們總買可以用得久一些的東西. |
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又是一個筆誤,
在名詞子句
(noun clause)
裡(做主動詞think的受詞)賺錢是主詞,
但make
money是動詞片語,
如同前面的一些錯誤,
要把make
money改成動名詞(gerund),
也就是動詞後面加ing,
作為名詞,
就可以理所當然地以名詞的身份成為主詞.
We think (that) making money is not the most important thing.
“is”是這個名詞子句裡的主動詞:
我們認為賺錢不是最重要的事. |
11 |
be
close to
親近的. close
是形容詞,
意思是接近或親近的意思. closed
雖然可以作形容詞用,
但有動詞的意思,
表示關閉,
結束的意思如: The office is closed. (下班了.) |
12 |
意思的轉承(transition)都要用副詞放在一個句子的最前面,
譬如這個段落說明喜歡單純生活的幾個原因,
第一個,
第二個,
一直到最後一個,
這些原因次序所用的副詞(first, second, finally)就叫做transitional words轉承詞.
除了表示次序(order, sequence)的轉承副詞如以上的first, second, finally之外,
常見的轉承副詞有: however, as a result, consequently,
by contrast, in addition, moreover, furthermore, besides, likewise,
similarly等等.
轉承副詞很重要,
因為它們為文章的內容建立環還相扣的情節,
是提昇閱讀與寫作能力的一項重要技巧.
在此處既然是副詞所以final改成finally. |
13 |
既然simple
lifestyle
是主詞,
且是單數第三人稱,
主動詞let應該改成lets. |
14 |
主動詞become像be動詞一樣,
用 “形容詞”
來形容主詞: Our life will become easy. (我們的生活會變得輕鬆.) |
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simple lifestyle是主詞,
後面加主動詞.
但maybe
是副詞;
it是人稱代名詞;
只有bring是動詞,
所以改成
Simple lifestyle brings more fun to
us than complex life.
記得bring要改成brings,
因為主詞
simple lifestyle是單數第三人稱.
另外it取消的原因是:
英文文法規定一個句子只能有一個主詞.
既然it指得就是simple
lifestyle所以取消it.
maybe表示可能性
(possibility),
是轉承副詞,
必須放在句子的最前面:
Maybe simple lifestyle brings us more fun than complex life.
或
Simple lifestyle may bring us more fun than complex life.
但對於自己的選擇太沒信心了,
才用可能
(maybe
或
may),
在現實情況裡,
對自己的處境不利,
故不用maybe.
同理,
will
也有不確定的語氣在,
故用現在簡單式(brings)陳述一件成立的事實,
也是對自己的選擇表示信心. |